https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-n9JqiGb3CY
I didn't receive much feedback for my post that required me to change much but the stuff that did was this. I changed the start of my pitch to include a little bit of a hook as well as changed up some other parts to make it more clear and content.
Hey Joseph,
ReplyDeleteI thought your elevator pitch was very concise and to the point. I like how you were able to directly explain to the viewer what exactly your idea is as well as how the product works as a whole. My only advice that I would give is just improving the coherency and the flow of your sentences, and not stopping mid sentence when speaking. Other than that, really good work.